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On the field of tarnished brown,
He spent the golden years of his youth in a storm of mud
and gunpowder and the disillusionment
that war was not the glorious thing he believed.

On the field where dreams were only evanescent
as crimson screams bled into smoky skies,
none of the soldiers remained exactly pure,
None of them untainted.

On the field with gunshots on replay,
He almost grew numb to it all,
to all the blood and chaos and fear and despair
as friends, enemies, cities turned to ashes,

And so did he.

On the field that was once an innocent green,
What was left of him was lowered into the ground
With shell fragments still inside so that war will never leave him,
Not even in the eternal peace of death.
Thought I'd write something for Remembrance Day ^_^ For people in countries that don't have it, basically it's a day to remember the soldiers that fought for us in the World Wars, and the ones that are still fighting today.

This poem is actually an entry for this contest my English teacher showed the class so it's a lot more structured and edited than my usual poetry.

Please comment and fave! Constructive criticism would be appreciated too.
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cmusicfreak Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013
YO. THIS ONE DOESN'T COUNT AS A POEM. I ALREADY SAW THIS ONEEEEEEE.
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frostyshadows Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Student
OF COURSE IT COUNTS AS A POEM
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cmusicfreak Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
doesn't count! stuff i've seen already DOES NOT COUNT
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frostyshadows Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student
BUT STILL, IT'S ONE FOR ONE RIGHT NOW AND IT'S EVEN SO YOU BETTER UPLOAD MORE LOL
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cmusicfreak Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013
blehhh. i have hw >.< when i'm less tireddddd~~
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frostyshadows Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Student
but you won't be less tired until after may
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cmusicfreak Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013
i'll make up for it then~
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frostyshadows Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Student
we have to do that manga then!
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Rhaevyn Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Frosty, you are wonderful!  What a visual, visceral, and fitting homage to all our fighting men and women.  I know nothing about poetry, at least not in technical terms, but I have only written ONE in my whole life haha.  I'm sticking to writing full length fiction.  But I am so happy to have found you in the Writers-Guild deviations.
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frostyshadows Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Student
thanks so much for your comment!

I'm actually more of a fiction writer than poetry too, and this is one of the very few poems I wrote so glad you like it :)
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